Look at your
Golden Sentences from Monday - the ones your peers thought really stood out.
Pick one of them:
- Type your sentence in.
- THEN write a few sentences about why you like it, what makes it strong or why you think other people liked it.
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Were you absent on Monday? Pick a sentence from your writing that you like to complete this!
"It was a small meadow, with a large rock in the middle painted gold, which caught the light of the sun and danced in my eyes." I think that this is a strong sentence because of the detail and good descprition of what the rock looks like. It is also stands apart from the rest because it is more complicated, and makes you think of what it looks like, making you paint a picture in your head.
ReplyDelete"I was shaking, sweating and on the boarder of crying when I couldn't open my locker."
ReplyDeleteI liked this sentence because it was very discriptive and many people can relate to this situation.
The streetlights castes weak beams of light that curled around the cold bars and gently settled upon the sewer bottom. I liked this sentence because it provides an intricate picture in the readers head. It is strong because of its full on detail.
ReplyDelete"On the way to Caden's we see a dead rat in the middle of the street." - I like this sentence because it introduces not only humor but more unusual, rare detail to the story. I also like this sentence because it gets people's attention.
ReplyDelete"Little did I know, one small decision, could completely change the coarse of my life." I really like this sentence because it is intriguing and would make me want to keep reading. It is strong because of how the wording makes the sentence flow and come together to make a perfect sentence.
ReplyDelete"He wasn't predicted to live passed one, and now he is four and fighting the cancer." I chose this sentence because it shows that good things happen to everyone.
ReplyDelete"We pushed button many times but it didn't open." I like this sentence because it gives me the feeling of something scary. And I think the scary feeling makes it strong.
ReplyDelete"Since my tongue was out, I bit some of it off, but it was somehow hanging on." I like this sentence because it puts a very disgusting image in the person's head. I also like this sentence because its very humorous to see the people's reaction when they hear it.
ReplyDelete"Some of the fall scents include 'honey autumn apple', 'sweet cinnamon pumpkin', 'brown sugar and fig' and 'dreamy vanilla woods'." I like this sentence because it helps the reader get a feeling for what those scents smell like.
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ReplyDeleteI also like that sentence because the reader might want to know more about what store they could find those particular scents at.
"When you first arrive it doesn't look to promisingbeacuse of the old, beat down, rickety, hobo, redneck like house in front." I like this sentence because of the picture of the house that is painted in your head about this not so humble abode. It is also nice because it is an acurate description of what I saw.
ReplyDeleteMy finger just grazed the side of the chair, but I winced.
ReplyDeleteI like this sentence because it suggests that somebody was in a lot of pain.
Then,we jumped i was laughing the whole way7 dow, but then it happened i hit my elbow on the sidewalk.
ReplyDeleteI think my group picked this sentence because it left them hanging on to the story and what happened to me and my elbow.And also how we handled the situation.
"One humid day in July my family held a garage sale and so did hers this is where I met my best friend." I liked this sentence because it could've worked in an part of my story.
ReplyDelete"Scars are like memories engraved on us." I like this sentence because it is a good metaphor. What makes it strong is the description of the words. I think others liked this sentence because it was a thoughtful sentence.
ReplyDelete"Imagine my reaction when he wasn't there." I think this sentence is a great sentence because it can be interpreted in many different ways. One way could be humorous, like "Imagine my reaction when he wasn't there! I was freaking out like a total doofus! Hahaha..." Or it can be upsetting, like "Imagine my reaction when he wasn't there. He was gone. I was scared and lonely..." I think people liked it for that reason.
ReplyDelete"Me and my sister moaned and got out of bed like zombies who'd been trapped in their graves for a hundred years." I like this sentence because it is, strong, and easy to under stand. Plus, I think zombies are pretty cool.
ReplyDelete"Throughout my life, i've been injured many times, and most of those injuries leave scars that are both mental and physical." I thought this was a strong sentence because it has truth in it. i also thought it was a strong sentence because it was thorough and it made you get interested in the story.
ReplyDelete"Picture this: Crystal clear waters lining sparkling white sand beaches, trimmed with thick green forests teeming with life and splattered with thin, white clouds." I think my group chose this sentence because it has a strong word choice and clearly describes the place I'm thinking of.
ReplyDelete"My mouth opened, but not a single sound was made as two arms swept me off the ground and held me close." I liked this sentence because it showed how fast everything went by and I beleive that others enjoyed this because it lets them thinks about what was happening.
ReplyDelete*not completed from my other comment* This sentence is strong because it shows how frantic the situation was and tells the readers what to feel.
ReplyDeleteYou might think I listen to some music but i listen to at least 6 hours of music a day I chose this sentence because it shows the truth blue block
ReplyDelete"When I got to the peak of my swing i leaned back but my weight shot the swing forward and I began to fall." I choose this sentence because it describes my movements really well.
ReplyDelete"Best friends should accept who you are" I think it's important for best friends to accept who you are. Cause if they don't, they're not your best friend.
ReplyDelete"I once screamed like a girl when my brother pranked me" I like that sentence bacause it's funny. My other reason is bacuase it told what i did, how i did it, and why i did it. I think it was the only sentece that included all 3
ReplyDelete"One of my favorite memories was going to my friend Greta`s beach house." I liked this sentence because I love that memory and it brought me back to the beach. I also love it because it was the opener for my story i always like introductions for stories.
ReplyDelete"I woke up th next morning with red dots the size of tennis balls all over my legs, it was so embarrassing"! My group picked this sentence because it descripes a picture of what the bites looked like and the size of them. They also thought it was funny that si said it was embarrassing to walk around with red dots the size of tennis balls around Sunriver.
ReplyDelete"I woke up th next morning with red dots the size of tennis balls all over my legs, it was so embarrassing"! My group picked this sentence because it descripes a picture of what the bites looked like and the size of them. They also thought it was funny that si said it was embarrassing to walk around with red dots the size of tennis balls around Sunriver.
ReplyDelete"I woke up th next morning with red dots the size of tennis balls all over my legs, it was so embarrassing"! My group picked this sentence because it descripes a picture of what the bites looked like and the size of them. They also thought it was funny that si said it was embarrassing to walk around with red dots the size of tennis balls around Sunriver.
ReplyDelete"I remember arriving and wondering where all of the hills were." I liked this sentance because It brings back great memories and it is very understandable.
ReplyDelete"I love the way the warm colors of the sunset colide and bounce off the horizon". I like this sentece, because it is descriptive. It paints a picture in my mind.
ReplyDelete"I felt a sharp pain." I think the people I shared with liked it because I used a word to describe the pain. I didn't just say, "I felt pain."
ReplyDelete"I was ten when my dad was convinced i could get a knife whithout stabbing myself boy was he wrong" I think people liked that sentence becacause it is foreshadowing i will stab someone of myself with a knife!!!!!
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''The hay had been roled up into golden marshmellos and scattered across the feild''. I like this sentance because it shows great describon. I also like it because it is very true to what it actually what it was like.
ReplyDelete"My comic book business startd out when I had the brilliant idea to start writing comics." I like that scentence because it says something about me that's never really been done before. I also liked it because I was successful with my comic book business because I made a lot of money from it.
ReplyDelete"The ocean is the first thing you see when you drive down the shop-lined 'Main Street'" I think people liked this sentence because it was very descriptive.
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ReplyDelete" When my brother got closer I was starting to ran faster". I think they like it because it told them why i was running faster.
ReplyDelete"Out of nowhere came a flying ninja in a black outfit he grabbed my chicken nugget and flew into the sunset. Then I realized he was really a crow.
ReplyDelete"Out of nowhere came a flying ninja in a black outfit he grabbed my chicken nugget and flew into the sunset. Then I realized he was really a crow.
ReplyDelete"Out of nowhere came a flying ninja in a black outfit he grabbed my chicken nugget and flew into the sunset. Then I realized he was really a crow.
ReplyDeleteI think people liked it because it was descriptive and funny.
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I don't exactly remember the day I was told that my ballet class was chosen to be snow flurries in the Nutcracker, and at the same time, I do.
ReplyDeleteThis golden sentence made me proud because it specifically describes how I felt when I was trying to remember that day.
"Since I was shorter than the statue I jumped on top if it with all of my might I got on it then fell off with my arm extended out and that is how I broke my arm."
ReplyDeleteI think it is a strong sentence because it tragic but also has a sense of humor. It also has my not thought out way of doing things.
''Its quite and calm''
ReplyDeleteI like it because it could be describing any thing.
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ReplyDelete''Its quite and calm''
ReplyDeleteI like it because it could be describing any thing.
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ReplyDeleteI like it because it could be describing any thing.
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ReplyDeleteI like it because it could be describing any thing.
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"The forest is small, but it holds its weight in memories." I think that people liked this sentance because it uses a metaphore of turning Weight into a size. I liked this sentance mainly because it makes the forest sound like the place that it is, a great memoryful, forest.
ReplyDelete"I tried one but then my throat felt like it was going to explode." I liked this sentence because it was descriptive.
ReplyDelete"I was really pumped when the day we left for Washington arrived." I think this is a strong sentence because it is very descriptive and shows my feeling. It also tells the reader what is happening and how I felt about it.
ReplyDeletei have had all these ingerys but my stupidist ingery was in 6th grade.
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"To some people 4th of July is a day celebrating our countries independence and to some its just an excuse to party" To me this is a strong sentence because it really explains how people celebrate 4th of july. I think other people like this line because it is also funny
ReplyDelete"It felt like I was hit on the head with a hammer"
ReplyDeleteI went for a exiting intro and I feel that it was surprising if I read this in a book it would probably suck me in. I like that if you were hit on the head you would pass out but it was an egsageration
"I made a bolting dash to the game room to take out Hayden. I like this sentence because its an exiting moment. I think others liked it because the sentence has a lot of action.
ReplyDeleteNow I have a scar on my left knee thanks to Newton's Law. I like this one because it is funny and it still shows what happened. It also explains what is on my knee.
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